The graph below show the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country

The graph below show the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country
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the
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information about recycling four
kind
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of material between 1982 and 2010 in
specfic
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specific
country
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. The unit is
percentage
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a percentage
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.
Overall
, the recycling
rate
of Aluminium cans and Plastics saw
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upward trend,
while
Paper and cardboard, Glass containers saw a decrease.
Aditionally
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, despite seeing a decrease, Paper and cardboard still showed the highest
rate
than any other materials through the time frame. Looking at the
rate
of Paper and cardboard, it increased unsteadily from 65% in 1982
,
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to exactly 80% in 1990, but
then
decreased substantially down to 70% in 2010.
Additonally
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Additionally
, Glas containers
also
saw a sizeable decrease, from 50% in 1982, down to 40%
on
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1990, before increased
moderatly
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moderately
to 60% in 2010. Moving on to the recycling
rate
of Aluminium cans, began
with
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nearly 5% in 1986,
then
icreased
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increased
dramatically,
reached
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to
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it
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peak,
45
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of 45
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% in 2010.
While
Aluminium cans had a lightning speed, Plastics
was
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more steady,
began
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beginning
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with
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approximately 3%, it gradually increased to about 8% in 2010.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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