The graph below show the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country
The given graph illustrates
the
information about recycling four Correct article usage
apply
kind
of material between 1982 and 2010 in Change to a plural noun
kinds
specfic
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specific
country
. The unit is Fix the agreement mistake
countries
percentage
.
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a percentage
the percentage
Overall
, the recycling rate
of Aluminium cans and Plastics saw a n
upward trend, Correct your spelling
an
while
Paper and cardboard, Glass containers saw a decrease. Aditionally
, despite seeing a decrease, Paper and cardboard still showed the highest Correct your spelling
Additionally
rate
than any other materials through the time frame.
Looking at the rate
of Paper and cardboard, it increased unsteadily from 65% in 1982,
to exactly 80% in 1990, but Remove the comma
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then
decreased substantially down to 70% in 2010. Additonally
, Glas containers Correct your spelling
Additionally
also
saw a sizeable decrease, from 50% in 1982, down to 40% on
1990, before increased Change preposition
in
moderatly
to 60% in 2010.
Moving on to the recycling Correct your spelling
moderately
rate
of Aluminium cans, began with
nearly 5% in 1986, Change preposition
at
then
icreased
dramatically, Correct your spelling
increased
reached
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and reached
to
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apply
it
peak, Change the pronoun
its
45
% in 2010. Change preposition
of 45
While
Aluminium cans had a lightning speed, Plastics was
more steady, Correct subject-verb agreement
were
began
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beginning
with
approximately 3%, it gradually increased to about 8% in 2010.Change preposition
at
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