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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009.
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The chart illustrates the
statistic
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 of international guests who went to the UK for several reasons from 1989 to 2009.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
people
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 who had a trip to the UK
was
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 the most population over 20 years. There is
also
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 a notetaking point that the size of
travelers
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travellers
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 who came to meet their
friends
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 and
relatives
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 went up quickly through the years. First of all, it can be seen that some individuals who entered the United Kingdom for trade were 5
million
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 tourists in 1989, up to the 1990s, it declined significantly to around 4.5
million
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then
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 considerably just over 6
million
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 visitors. On the one hand, it witnessed that
people
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 who visited
friends
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 and
relatives
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 rose moderately to 5
million
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 in 1999.
On the other hand
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, the figure for businesspeople remained relatively stable, before climbing rapidly to 9
million
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 guests before 1999. Over the following 10 years, the number of
people
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 who came to see
friends
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 and
relatives
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 was nowhere near as crowded as
people
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 went to commerce, with 7
million
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 and 8
million
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 respectively. After 2009, there was a substantial increase of 4
million
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people
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 who came to see their
friends
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 and
relatives
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.
However
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, there was a gradual decrease in both overseas
travelers
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such
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 as traders and visiting
friends
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, about 6
million
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 and 7
million
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 in turn.
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, there was a downward trend in many
people
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 visiting the UK for a trip over the period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, friends, relatives, million with synonyms.
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