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Reading story books is better for children than watching television or playing computer games. Do you agree or disagree?

It is often considered that it is more advantageous for the
kids
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 to indulge themselves in reading novels or comic
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 than to invest their leisure
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 seeing small screen or enjoy digital games.
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 many people contradict
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 notion,
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 I opine with
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 viewpoint and
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 agree that
kids
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 should invest their leisure
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 in reading fictional
books
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, rather than watching
television
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 programs or playing digital games. First and foremost, reading tale
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 is far more beneficial as it helps youngsters to think creatively and broaden their horizons in storytelling and building a vast mind with more effective thoughts. Since studying novels stimulates their thinking
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, it
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 helps them to imagine and visualize things more effectively and creatively. In
this
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 way, they can build their vocabulary and improve their written abilities.
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, there are few young ones who develop their way of thinking and eventually become famous artists and painters,
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 storytellers rather than those
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 who possess a conservative thought process and thereby do not have the
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 to think broadly.
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, a renowned scriptwriter named Emma Thomas is apparently the most successful
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 in the entertainment industry. Ever since she was a teenager she used to invest a large part of her
time
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 in reading story
books
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, which ultimately developed her writing
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,
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 it
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 helped her in visualizing scenes in her mind.
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,
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 her proficiency in
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 skill, it was a piece of cake for her to achieve huge success in story writing. That's why reading fictional
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 rather than wasting
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 on
television
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 is prudent, as
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 approach
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 leads to more efficient and productive outcomes.
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, book readers turn out to be the brightest pupils at school.
Kids
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 who frequently indulge themselves in
books
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 develop a stronger bond with their academics as well, and
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, produce much better outcomes.
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, those who find
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 to be boring and tedious feel like fish out of water during the class.
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, youngsters who are a bit lazy and lethargic in terms of investing their
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 in
books
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 are usually the ones achieving the lower grades because their interests and passions vary and are more towards the
television
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 and entertainment side.
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, the young ones who are fond of
books
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 tend to have a stronger intellect and perform much better, and
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 enhance their cognitive
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 and improve memory. In conclusion, the question of whether children should prefer fictional
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 as a past-
time
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 activity or watch
television
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 programs is a nuanced one.
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, I strongly agree with the notion of children's interest and passion for reading novels, as it helps them to develop a broad mind and
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, they perform more effectively at school.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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