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some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime.Others,however, argue that the circumstances of individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, it should always be taken into account when deciding on the guiltiness

#people #punishments #type #crime #circumstances #motivation #account #guiltiness
Some
people
 think that every malefaction has an unchanging penalty.
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 of the
people
,
however
,discuss that the situations of a
personel
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personal
crime
, and the incentive for perpetrating it, should always
consider
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 when making a decision about the punishment.It is true that someone who
commited
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committed
 a
crime
 must be judged but it should be fair. I am sure that the
people
 who
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 fixed punishments,
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miss the aim of
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judgement
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judgment
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 system.Because every person might make a mistake and
then
they
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regret
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. So we should bring back them to
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community
.
For example
, a thief and a killer must not be in the same category because one of them can fix her/his fault but
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 one can not.
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 of
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 penalty, convicted
people
 with an unimportant
crime
 can do unpaid service under the control of an observer so that , they do not feel like a prisoner and understand
awareness
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 of
public
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the public
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.
On the other hand
, the other part persons who approach the circumstances intensively like me believe that everybody
deserve
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 a second chance in
the
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life .Because
individual
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individuals
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 learn the corrects via experiences.
For instance
, in a prison in Finland, the government set up a regulation about gaining prisoners again. The management of Finland send them to an island
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that
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 has different facilities
such
 as
library
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a library
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,pool,sport centers
etc
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etc.
... And for a
while
 , they
left
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 there. 70% of them did not perpetrate the same
crime
.
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, every condition is specific like every person we should
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into
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 account when deciding on the guiltiness.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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