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Some people believe government should spend money in saving languages of few speaker from dying out completely. Others think this is a waste of financial resources. Discuss both views and give opinion.

#people #government #money #languages #speaker #waste #resources
Around the world, there are
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many minority
ethinic
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ethnic
 who have cultural and
language
 private. And population
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 sparse and
people
learn
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 their
language
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very
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apply
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few
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. So
the
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they
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speker
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speak
 their
language
 low and endanger extinction completely. In order to
saving
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 languages
that
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apply
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the
governmen
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government
need
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needs
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spend
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 money
for
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this
. When they carry out
missons
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missions
, they face up with 2 side
opinion
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opinions
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. One group support
this
 and
other
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the other
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think
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 it
vey
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very
waste
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a waste
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 of financial resources.
This
 issue that
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 will see you both of side.
First,
we will discuss why many
people
 objected
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missons
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missions
mission
save
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saving
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language
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the language
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 of
few
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a few
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speaker
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speakers
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. Because the money that the
government
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uses
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for
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apply
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is taxing their hand in for
state
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the state
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. They think the
government
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needs
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use
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 the tax
for
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to
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 improve their
life
 and help poor
people
. They
belive
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believe
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 reserve the
language
 is not necessary for
life
 and
unuseful
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is unuseful
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. When the
government
 do not develop their habitant
life
, they
not
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do not
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 allow waste
thier
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their
 tax for other work.
Second,
we argue with the
people
 who
agree
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onagree
toagree
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 the
misson
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mission
. They think history is part of
life
. The
government
 must
reserve
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preserve
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 culture and
language
. The past is very important. If we
not
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the
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pass, we will have
the
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a
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 future. We
need
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 develop and pass down it to the next generation. In conclusion,
i
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I
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 think reserve and develop
language
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a language
the language
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 of
few
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a few
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speaker
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speakers
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. A
few
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little
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 money
use
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used
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for saving
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to save
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language
 is not full to improve
life
 but it will save diverse cultures.
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