Some people believe government should spend money in saving languages of few speaker from dying out completely. Others think this is a waste of financial resources. Discuss both views and give opinion.

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Around the world, there are
have
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many minority
ethinic
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ethnic

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who have cultural and
language
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private. And population
very
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sparse and
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learn
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language
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own language

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very
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few
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the
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they

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speker
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speak

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their
language
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low and endanger extinction completely. In order to
saving
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languages
that
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the
governmen
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need
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needs

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spend
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money
for
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on

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this
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. When they carry out
missons
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missions

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, they face up with 2 side
opinion
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opinions

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. One group support
this
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and
other
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the other

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think
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thinks

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it
vey
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very

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waste
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a waste

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of financial resources.
This
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issue that
i
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will see you both of side.
First,
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we will discuss why many
people
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objected
the
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to the

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missons
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missions
mission

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save
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saving

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language
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the language

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of
few
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a few

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speaker
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speakers

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. Because the money that the
government
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use
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uses

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for
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apply

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is taxing their hand in for
state
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the state

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. They think the
government
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need
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needs

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use
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the tax
for
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to

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improve their
life
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and help poor
people
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. They
belive
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believe

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reserve the
language
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is not necessary for
life
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and
unuseful
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. When the
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do not develop their habitant
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, they
not
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allow waste
thier
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their

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tax for other work.
Second,
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we argue with the
people
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who
agree
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onagree
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withagree

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the
misson
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mission

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. They think history is part of
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. The
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must
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preserve

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culture and
language
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. The past is very important. If we
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the
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pass, we will have
the
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a

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future. We
need
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toneed

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develop and pass down it to the next generation. In conclusion,
i
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think reserve and develop
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language
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a language
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of
few
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a few

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speaker
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speakers

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. A
few
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money
use
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for saving
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language
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is not full to improve
life
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but it will save diverse cultures.

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