In some countries, older people are encouraged to work longer and avoid retirement. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your opinion.

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Elder
people
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has
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have

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choiced
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chosen

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to work in
office
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an office
the office

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and do not want to
left
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leave

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their jobs
in
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for

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more longer
time
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. Generally, it can give benefits and drawbacks for
industry
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the industry

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and
theirself
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themselves

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. In my opinion,
human
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humans

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above 60 years old must be at home and spend more
time
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to relax
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relaxing

To relax doesn’t seem to work here.

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. Looking into more detail, there are three advantages why
elder
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elderly

The word elder doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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people
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should have more
time
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at the office.
First,
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they have more qualifications and
responsibilty
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responsibility

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to do their job. To explain the qualifications
,
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apply

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can be seen if they have
problem
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a problem

The noun phrase problem seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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. They can solve
the
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apply

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problems
quickly
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more quickly

It seems that quantifier use may be incorrect here.

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than younger
people
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because they have more experience
to resolve
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in resolving

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some
situation
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situations

It seems that situation may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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. They have many
situation
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situations

The singular countable noun situation follows the quantifier many, which requires a plural noun. Consider using a plural noun or a different quantifier.

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that they
had
Wrong verb form
have

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passed. It can
Unnecessary verb
apply

The verb be appears to be unnecessary here.

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be
Verb problem
apply

There may be a verb use issue here.

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make them more professional than others.
Another benefits
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Another benefit
Other benefits

The adjective another appears to be modifying the plural noun benefits. Consider replacing it with the adjective other.

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, they have more
responsibilty
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responsibility

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to do their work because of
mature
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the maturity

The word mature doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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of their ages. They can think more
positive
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positively

Positive seems to be the wrong part of speech for this context.

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and
calm
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calmly

Calm seems to be the wrong part of speech for this context.

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,
also
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they have control
their
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of their

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emotional
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emotions

The word emotional doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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.
Despite
Correct pronoun usage
Despite this

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, they have
benefitsm
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benefits

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they
also
Linking Words

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have
disadvatages
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disadvantages

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. Their physics are different if we compare
to
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them to

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productive
worker
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workers

It seems that worker may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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.
For example
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, their energy adv - more
profesional
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professional

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- spent more
time
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- there are some
reason
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reasons

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why elder
people
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must quit
from
Change preposition
apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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their job. First, - do not have more energy - more
profesional
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professional

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can make negative - big salary
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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