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the plans below show a public park when it first opened in1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The plans illustrate the Grange
park
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Park
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 in two different periods.
the
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The
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park
 is located between Arnold
avenue
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Avenue
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 and Eldon
street
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Street
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 which
is
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has
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 changed hugely since 1920 until now.
Overall
, the
park
 become a great modern place for citizens
compare
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compared
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 with the past and
also
 it redesigned for people
have
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 better communication in public.
Firstly
, in 1920, there was a stage for musicians which
is
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has
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 become a superb Amphitheatre for concerts now.
Moreover
, in the east-south of the
park
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 there was a glasshouse
while
 now it changed with a water feature.
Furthermore
, a rose garden was
lied
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laid
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 with four seats
instead
 of
fountain
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the fountain
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 in the
park
center
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.
Secondly
, one of the rose gardens
changed
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 by a café in the north. The other cultural platform in the
park
 is a children’s play area which was a pond for water plants in 1920. Generally, the Grange
park
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Park
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 was a traditional place in 1920 but now it is a modern
park
 with many facilities for entertainment.
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  • alterations
  • renovations
  • modernize
  • upgraded
  • transformed
  • landscaping
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • preservation
  • heritage
  • green spaces
  • eco-friendly
  • public space
  • community impact
  • historical elements
  • conservation
  • recreational areas
  • urban planning
  • sustainable development
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