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The government should control the amount of violence in films and on television in order to control violent crimes in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this action?

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Nowadays, there is an increasing number of
violence
 in
films
 and
television
. The
government
 needs to take action to
control
 the amount of
violence
 in
films
 and
television
 in order to
control
 violent crime in society. In fact, I strongly agree that the
government
 needs to
control
violence
 in
films
 and
television
.
To begin
 with, the cruelty in TV and
movies
 can affect the viewers' attitudes. In
this
 modern era, many
movies
 contain bad attitudes
such
 as fighting with friends and pranking
people
.
However
, the viewers of these
films
 are not only adults but
also
 youngsters. They can easily find the harmful content on
television
.
Moreover
, parents are afraid that their children will imitate the bad behaviours in
films
.
For instance
, students bully their friends at school because they believe that it will make them the centre of attention just like in the
movies
. By having
control
 from the
government
, children can not watch
movies
 that influence them to do bad things.
As a result
,
people
 will have a good attitude. The next reason why the
government
 should take action to
control
films
 and
movies
 is that change perspectives in society. By watching violent
movies
 regularly,
people
 can easily have negative thoughts.
For instance
, citizens who usually watch war
films
 become less sympathetic to
people
. They will feel reluctant to help
people
 around them. For illustration, an adult who has a real situation watching somebody shoot others will feel numb and not blame the shooter.
Consequently
, the level of sensitivity to others will decrease gradually.
To sum up
,
violence
 in
movies
 and TV is not only causing the viewers' attitudes to change but
also
 changing their perspectives. Having considered the drawbacks, I have no doubt that the
government
 needs to take action in
movies
 and TV.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • normalize
  • desensitize
  • propensity
  • vulnerable populations
  • impressionable
  • emulate
  • stifles
  • creative freedom
  • censorship
  • slippery slope
  • media literacy
  • conclusively proven
  • socioeconomic conditions
  • mental health services
  • age ratings
  • content warnings
  • artistic freedom
  • informed choices
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