MANY YOUNG PEOPLE SPEND MUCH OF THEIR FREE TIME IN SHOPPING MALLS.THIS HAS A NEGATIVE EFFECT ON THEM AND SOCIETY. TO WHAT EXTEND DO YOU AGREE OR DIS AGREE?

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can change to according times. A lot of young

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spend their free

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malls

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because, they can find things like cafes, shopping stores, playgrounds,

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etc. That has some advantages and disadvantages.

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get decision to go to

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as rain, snow, hot or cold. because the weather can not stop young

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that's why their choice is to go to the

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example, the son of my friend goes to a shopping

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every day with his friends and I asked him one day;

why

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do you go to the

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every day? he said ;

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can enjoy ourselves there, not to need go to another place and there is everything that you want, and weather is same every

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in the

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when we go for a walkabout in the city centre or another; maybe can be

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or cold there. On the other side, we can meet new friends there.

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, going to something

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is sometimes bad for our health because

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the closed places and don't change the air

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is not good

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some

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, pandemic

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all

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were closed because Corona varises are affected by

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there.

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malls

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are very important to develop cities. because

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pull tourists and young

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. In my opinion, a lot of

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will open in future and close stores on the street, even will closed tors and

people

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do online shopping that

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o lot of

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will close at home. We have

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still, we should go to the

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for young

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MANY YOUNG PEOPLE SPEND MUCH OF THEIR FREE TIME IN SHOPPING MALLS.THIS HAS A NEGATIVE EFFECT ON THEM AND SOCIETY. TO WHAT EXTEND DO YOU AGREE OR DIS AGREE?

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In some countries, the difference in age between parents and children is generally greater than it was in the past. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?