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The graph shows average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph compares the data about the average spending money in a year on residential
phone
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services
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 and cell
phone
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services
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 by American consumers over a period of ten years from 2001 to 2010. From the figures, it can be inferred that residential
phone
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services
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 experienced a dramatic rise. In stark contrast, residential
phone
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services
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 saw a significant decline in expenditure in these ten years.
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, it is noticeable that in the year 2006, both communication tools comprised the same amount of money by individuals. In 2001, landline utilization stood at 700$ and accounted for a steady fall.
On the other hand
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,
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 labour statistics, consumption of mobile began from just over 200$ and increased by 100$ in 2002.
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, contained a smooth increase, and reached roughly 310$ in 2003. After that, climbed sharply to reach approximately 530$ in 2006 as same as landline expenditure. Following the year 2006, both of them divided into two different trends, and the average yearly expenditure on landlines dropped by nearly 100$ and stopped at 420$ in 2010.
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, the consumption of wireless phones soared to around 780$.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words phone, services with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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