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it is better for students to study from home rather than go to school.Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#students #study #home #school
A controversial discussion point is whether pupils should learn at
home
instead
 of going to
school
 .
Although
 the writer
disagree
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 with homeschooling
can be
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 more convenient ,some people believe it is
students’right
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students
 to
study
 at
home
. On the one hand,I hold the view that
youngster
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youngsters
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 should
study
 at
school
 because of the following reasons.
To begin
 with, students can easily pay more attention
in
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 their lessons and understand them when
study
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studying
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 with instructors face-to-face,which they can not gain when
study
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studying
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 at
home
 or self-studying.Teachers will answer all your questions
professionaly
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professionally
.
In addition
to
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,schools usually celebrate many competitions with all the fields for pupils to improve useful skills.
Moreover
,going to
school
 can make many good
relationship
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 with friends and teachers.
On the other hand
,it is vital to understand why people think studying at
home
 is the best choice for students.
Firstly
,students can learn to control themselves
not
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 to be
distractive
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 in
study
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 and their timetable.
Secondly
,it is convenient for
youngster
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 to
study
 lessons with
variety
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a variety
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information
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of information
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 on
Internet
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. In conclusion, I believe that going to
school
 helps learners improve their vital skills in learning and not depend on high tech.

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