Many people believe that television programs are no value for children. Do you agree? Why and why not? Provide reasons and examples to support your response.

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bad behaviour and morality which leads him to criminal and other negativity. In conclusion, I disagree that

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are bad influences or provide no value to

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because not all

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are bad and many

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share positive morals and values that can help

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to develop themselves.

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, to mitigate the bad influence from

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, I would recommend parents to supervise their

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