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Many people believe that television programs are no value for children. Do you agree? Why and why not? Provide reasons and examples to support your response.

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children
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harmful point for kids.
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children
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children
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from watching
television
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 can watch many educational
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programmes
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children
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different
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through
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 watching a series of foreign languages.
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children
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television
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technology
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technologies
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can
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family members
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children
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parents
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harmful effects of
television
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children
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they
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watching
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programs
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teach
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children
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television
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bad behaviour and morality which leads him to criminal and other negativity. In conclusion, I disagree that
television
programs
 are bad influences or provide no value to
children
 because not all
television
programs
 are bad and many
television
programs
 share positive morals and values that can help
children
 to develop themselves.
In addition
, to mitigate the bad influence from
television
programs
, I would recommend parents to supervise their
children
while
 watching
television
.
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