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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to request you for another
room
.The girl with whom I am sharing my
room
 currently is giving me a very hard time,
beacuse
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because
 she is
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a very
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very
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a very
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 unorganized and
unhygine
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hygiene
unhygienic
 person. It has been two months
that
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since
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 I never saw her
cleaning
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 the
room
especially
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 her side, now
the
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 whole
room
 stinks and
made
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makes it
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 difficult to stay.
Moreover
, she and her friends almost stay at late night
everyday
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 doing parties in the
room
 which not only
affecting
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affects
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 my
stuides
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studies
 but
also
 my health. I have suggested
her
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she
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to
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clean
as well as
to
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do parties out of the
room
, but she's never
get
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been
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 bothered to change her lifestyle. Would you kindly provide me a
room
 with
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a quite
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quite
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quiet
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room
 where I can focus on my study and health
.
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 I have no problem
in
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sharing the
room
 until and unless the next person is cooperative, as I have shared the
room
 before, and I never give a chance to anybody to complain. I look forward to hearing from you.
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Yours
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Your
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Yours
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 sincerely Akankasha
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation officer
  • roommate
  • share a room
  • living arrangement
  • difficult to work
  • noise levels
  • study environment
  • privacy concerns
  • alternative accommodation
  • single room
  • academic performance
  • well-being
  • respectfully request
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