It is responsibility of individuals to save and provide for their own retirement. Governments have no obligation to provide this benefit. To what extend to you agree or disagree with these statements?

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themselves after they refrained from working

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and the government should not be liable towards paying them. I strongly disagree with

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and think that citizens pay taxes as an investment and it is a challenge to make an estimation as to how much a person should or is capable of keeping for future purposes. To start with, nationals are levied taxation to aid the government so that it can benefit its citizens in various areas.

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infrastructure, education etc., it should be noted that individuals are already giving away the money they could save.

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them after retirement.

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and happily deploys a portion of their earnings to the authorities.

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is demanding in terms of healthcare and the inflation rate may be over the prediction.

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the earthquake in Nepal, the country's nationals had to face monetary loss in the economic sector,

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can be accomplished by utilising their taxes and maintaining proper policies.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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quality of life
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