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Many countries consider eighteen-year-olds to be adults, while other countries don’t. What do you think about it? Give your opinion and some relevant examples based on your own experience.

#countries #eighteen-year-olds #adults #don’t
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One of the controversial subjects around the world is
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what
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age
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 children become mature. In many
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 the
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 of adults is eighteen,
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 some society has a different opinion. I tend
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to believe
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 that mental growth
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one person
 to another. In the following essay. I am going to discuss my idea in detail. First of all, in some societies adults literally refer only to the
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 of humans,
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 I believe that an adult person should grow mentally and physically together. There are many factors that need to be considered to say that someone is an adult person among them I can point to
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, geographical conditions, behaving logically in many situations especially tough
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 and taking responsibility for one's life,
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 in the past in Iran, a girl who was nine years old got married as they were able to take responsibility to do the task of wife and mother and their parents say their daughter is prepared to manage a family. These days getting married to an Iranian girl under 18 years old is forbidden.
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