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The level of noise around us is constantly increasing ,and is affecting the quality of our lives. what causes this noise? what should be done about it ?

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The
sound
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that is
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 not acceptable to the ears or any jarring
sound
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 is known as
noise
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 pollution. In
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 ,essay we will learn about the causes and the solutions to mitigate
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 problem.
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, in today's day-to-day ,life the main reason for
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 pollution is the huge traffic on roads. The loud horns are unbearable. The other reasons are huge machinery in factories ,on roads ,highways, streets etc.
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, the loudspeakers used in public places
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 marriages, parties etc are very loud . The
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 of engines ,speakers , and horns at railway stations is
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 intolerable for the humans living near to stations. Sometimes it may lead to deaf people. Sometimes the students who are studying and preparing for their exams are unable to study only because of
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 increasing
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. I personally feel irritated by high volume whenever not feeling well and
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 when trying my baby to sleep. On the other ,hand the health of the patients who are in the roadside hospitals is
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 affected
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 any jarring
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.
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, we will eradicate
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 trouble in many ways like more and more trees should be planted on the roadside . The heavy machinery must be kept inside soundproof cabins. Soundproof doors and windows should be installed to overcome the
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. For humans, the sake of loudspeakers should be strictly banned from public places. Stop blowing horns if not needed. In conclusion, there are many causes of
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 pollution and it is possible that we can mitigate
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 problem by taking various steps.
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