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You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays. You decide to apply for the job. Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter: •introduce yourself •explain what experience and special skills you have •explain why you are interested in the job

#advertisement #english #newspaper #job #city #museum #shop #holidays #director #•introduce #•explain #skills
Dear
SIr
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Sir
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 or Madam , I am writing to inform you that
i
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wanted
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 to apply for the
job
regarding
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of
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 customer service
assistance
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 that
advertised
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was advertised
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 in the
english
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English
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 newspaper . I think
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 have all the qualifications and proficiencies
that
is
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 required for the
job
 . I am post
graduate
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postgraduate
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 student of the Dhakila
Unviversity
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University
 of your city and I have completed
graduation
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my graduation
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 in plantd and anthropology . I live close to your museum and
available
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 anytime for
this
job
 .
Although
 , I have two
year
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professional
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expirence
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experience
 in
the
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apply
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customer service in the museum , where
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 provide valuable information to the clients regarding any picture and even share the history behind it . I am interested in
this
job
 because it will improve my social skills
as well as
providing
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 me opportunity to enhance my experience with professionals . I attached
CV
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 with the letter and
also
provide
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 contact information
in
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apply
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it
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apply
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. I hope
i
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 will
recieve
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receive
call
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a call
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 soon . Yours faithfully , Roopkamal
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Kaur
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kaur
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tone and coherence
Begin with a proper salutation that includes the recipient's name if known, otherwise 'Dear Hiring Manager' is preferable over 'Dear SIr or Madam,' to avoid typographical errors and improve professionalism.
structure
Use paragraphing to organize your letter efficiently; start with your introduction and intent, followed by your experience and skills, and conclude with your interest and availability. Each section should be a separate paragraph for clarity.
grammar and punctuation
Proofread your letter to correct spelling and grammatical errors (e.g., 'I am post graduate student of the Dhakila Unviversity,' should be 'I am a postgraduate student at Dhakila University') and ensure proper punctuation and capitalization for a professional tone.
content depth
Include specific examples of your responsibilities and achievements in your previous job to strengthen your claim of having the required qualifications and proficiencies.
closing and professionalism
Polish your closing statement by ensuring it sounds professional and eager but not overly assumptive of the outcome (e.g., 'I look forward to the possibility of discussing this exciting opportunity with you.'). Attach your CV as mentioned, but remember not to mention it in the letter itself as it could be seen as a professional faux pas; instead, ensure it's actually attached to the email or application.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Dear Director,
  • enthusiastic applicant
  • pursuing a degree in
  • customer service experience
  • volunteer work
  • multilingual
  • cash handling
  • POS systems
  • team player
  • punctual
  • excellent communicator
  • cultural enthusiast
  • part-time position
  • professional references available
  • at your earliest convenience
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