Nowadays people like to use new electronic equipment. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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fastly
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wide
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from healthcare assistance to navigation. At
this
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a question comes to
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minds
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: whether the
use
of electronic
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a positive amendment? It can be easily stated that using electronic
devices
makes people’s lives easier by helping on the road and monitoring general health
status
without a licenced medical worker.
Firstly
, there are numerous disparate applications which are designed to help drivers in order to provide the shortest and
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congested route, and thanks to these applications people may access their destination in
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. Imagine a man who wants to reach his meeting in
time
, when
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man
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the
traffic
status
via an app
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his mobile phone, he may change his route
according to
the data
aboout
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about
traffic
congestion.
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with another man who does not
use
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to check the
traffic
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, former men
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likely to reach
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in
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his
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time
.
To sum up
, with
a
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electronic
devise
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which is easy to
use
and common, people may make their life more comfortable and may keep themselves
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unintended
situationd
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situations
situation
like heavy
traffic
.
On the other hand
, with the usage of
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electronic device like a
smart watch
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individuals may monitor their pulse and body temperature themselves. Let’s think about, a woman who has
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heart disease and irregular heart
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rhythm
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, if
this
woman
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a
smart watch
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smartwatch
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, she can
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her pulse and once she
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an unexpected change, she can contact
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her doctor earlier than
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patient who does not
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a smart
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smart watch
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.
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, since the watch records the data,
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the doctor
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may utilize
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the data
while
planning the treatment or medication. To wrap up, some technological
devices
may provide crucial information for doctors and patients, as well.
To conclude
,
usage
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of new
electronical
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electronic
equipments
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equipment
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provides variable benefits to
people
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lifes
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.
Devices
which bring different route options to drivers and monitor
the
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health
status
may play
a
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elementary role in
individuals
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life
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. As long as
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companies or governments increase their investment
on
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electronic
devices
, people’s
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may become more comfortable .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological progress
  • innovation
  • efficiency
  • environmental issues
  • electronic waste
  • digital literacy
  • accessibility
  • over-dependence
  • face-to-face interactions
  • economic growth
  • consumerism
  • planned obsolescence
  • financial stability
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