Nowadays people like to use new electronic equipment. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Electronic
devices
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have
spreaded
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spread

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fastly
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fast

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and begun to
utilizing
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utilise

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wide
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a wide

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range of
field
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fields

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from healthcare assistance to navigation. At
this
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point
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point,

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a question comes to
the
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apply

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minds
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mind

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: whether the
use
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of electronic
devises
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devices

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is
Verb problem
apply

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a positive amendment? It can be easily stated that using electronic
devices
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makes people’s lives easier by helping on the road and monitoring general health
status
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without a licenced medical worker.
Firstly
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, there are numerous disparate applications which are designed to help drivers in order to provide the shortest and
less
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least

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congested route, and thanks to these applications people may access their destination in
shorter
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a shorter

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time
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. Imagine a man who wants to reach his meeting in
time
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, when
this
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

man
control
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controls

The plural verb control does not appear to agree with the singular subject this man. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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the
traffic
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status
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via an app
in
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on

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his mobile phone, he may change his route
according to
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the data
aboout
Correct your spelling
about

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traffic
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congestion.
Comparison
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In comparison

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with another man who does not
use
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any
devise
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device

The word devise doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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to check the
traffic
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status
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, former men
is
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are

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likely to reach
destination
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their destination

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in
time
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and save
his
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apply

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time
Use synonyms

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.
To sum up
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, with
a
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an

The article a may be incorrect. Consider changing it to agree with the beginning sound of the following word electronic.

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electronic
devise
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device

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which is easy to
use
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and common, people may make their life more comfortable and may keep themselves
some
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in some

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unintended
situationd
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situations
situation

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like heavy
traffic
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.
On the other hand
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, with the usage of
a
Change the article
an

The article a may be incorrect. Consider changing it to agree with the beginning sound of the following word electronic.

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electronic device like a
smart watch
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smartwatch

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individuals may monitor their pulse and body temperature themselves. Let’s think about, a woman who has
a
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apply

The indefinite article, a, may be redundant when used with the uncountable noun disease in your sentence. Consider removing it.

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heart disease and irregular heart
rhytm
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rhythm
rhythms

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, if
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

woman
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Use synonyms
use
Change the verb form
uses

The plural verb use does not appear to agree with the singular subject this woman. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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a
smart watch
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smartwatch

The word smart watch seems to be miswritten. Consider replacing it.

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, she can
be check
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check

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her pulse and once she
realize
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realizes

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an unexpected change, she can contact
with
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apply

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her doctor earlier than
a
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the

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patient who does not
use
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a smart

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smart watch
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smartwatch

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.
Furthermore
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, since the watch records the data,
doctor
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the doctor
a doctor

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may utilize
from
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apply

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the data
while
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planning the treatment or medication. To wrap up, some technological
devices
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may provide crucial information for doctors and patients, as well.
To conclude
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

,
usage
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the usage

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of new
electronical
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electronic

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equipments
Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment

It appears that equipments is an uncountable noun and should not be made plural. Consider changing the noun.

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provides variable benefits to
people
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people's

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lifes
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lives

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.
Devices
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which bring different route options to drivers and monitor
the
Change the word
their

The word the may be incorrect in this context. Consider changing it.

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health
status
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may play
a
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an

The article a may be incorrect. Consider changing it to agree with the beginning sound of the following word elementary.

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elementary role in
individuals
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individuals'
individual's

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life
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lives

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. As long as
the
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apply

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companies or governments increase their investment
on
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in

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electronic
devices
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, people’s
life
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lives

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may become more comfortable .

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Ensure that the essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. The current structure is somewhat unclear and the introduction does not effectively set up the essay.
supported main points
Focus on paragraph structure. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea supported by examples or explanations.
logical structure
Improve the logical flow of ideas between sentences and paragraphs to help the reader easily follow your arguments. Use a range of cohesive devices effectively.
complete response
Address the task directly and present a clear position throughout the response. Make sure that the response answers the question fully and that the position is clear.
clear comprehensive ideas
Clarify and develop your ideas fully. Avoid ambiguity and ensure that each paragraph expands on a single clear idea related to the topic.
relevant specific examples
Include relevant, specific examples to support arguments. The examples in the essay are adequate, but they can be improved by providing more details and explanations.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological progress
  • innovation
  • efficiency
  • environmental issues
  • electronic waste
  • digital literacy
  • accessibility
  • over-dependence
  • face-to-face interactions
  • economic growth
  • consumerism
  • planned obsolescence
  • financial stability
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