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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past 30 years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam’. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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Over the
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 thirty years,
cars
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 have become more affordable and accessible to the middle class of society. With
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 rapid increase in ownership over time, many cities have suffered from frequent traffic jams caused by several conjunctions of
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 filling up the road. Currently,
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 is a major problem here in Vietnam, which is why
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 statement is incredibly true. I will
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 elaborate and clip a hypothetical solution to
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 essay.
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, the average size of a car is an estimate of two motorcycles and back
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cars
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 were usually reserved for rich people, so traffic mapping for large vehicles like these was never accounted for, which is why when people started buying
cars
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, they were taking up too much space. Because of the high volume of
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 on the road, the air is more polluted
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 the excessive amount of toxic fumes released by these vehicles. They run on gas, and
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 electric
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 exist to fix that problem nowadays, they are still unaffordable to the common citizen.
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, the most hypothetically viable solution that the government can act on now, is to advise the public to limit their car usage in motorcycle-populated areas as an effective measure to reduce traffic tension and air pollution.
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,
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 will establish boundaries for both car owners and bikers; creating a safer transport medium between the two parties involved. In conclusion,
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 method will definitely require full cooperation and a hefty period of time to fully implement. It will be difficult, but the result will benefit greatly in the end.
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