The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.
The line graph illustrates the usage of fish,
lamb
,
beef
and
chicken
in European countries from 1974 to 2004. The units are measured in grams per person per week.
Overall
, it is noticeable that the consumption of
beef
was the highest used
meat
,
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before
chicken
replaced it from 1994 to 2004. The figure for
lamb
was the lowest consumed
meat
,
while
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chicken
was the largest used
meat
over the
period
in question.
Furthermore
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there was a significant increase in the usage of
beef
and
chicken
,
whereas
the figures for
beef
, fish and
lamb
decreased gradually. At the beginning of the
period
, the amount of used
beef
was over 200 in 1979 before decreasing to 160 in 1984 and
levelleding
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levelling
out during the next 5 years.
However
,
it
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the figure for
beef
dropped moderately from 160 to over 100 from 1984 to
in
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2007. With regards to the usage of
chicken
, it went up remarkably from 140 to 250
in
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1979
2007
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and was the largest used
meat
in the final years. The consumption of
lamb
went down progressively from 150 to 70 over the
period
in question.
while
the amount of used fish eaten fell marginally from 60 to 50 between 1974 and 1984 , before holding steadily during the next 10 years and was the lowest used food over the
period
in question.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words lamb, beef, chicken, meat, period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transported goods
  • Quantities
  • Trends
  • Modes of transport
  • Rail
  • Road
  • Water
  • Pipeline
  • Fluctuations
  • Predominance
  • Economic influences
  • Societal changes
  • Technological advancements
  • Environmental impact
  • Growth
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Comparison
  • Period (e.g., decade, years)
  • Examination
  • Implications
  • Analysis
  • Conclusion
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