Some people believe that the arts (such as music, literature, and theater) are more important than other subjects in schools. Do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that the
arts
are an important subject.
While
it is a commonly held belief that
arts
are more important than other classes in schools, there is
also
an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that the
arts
are not as necessary as other subjects.
To begin
with, there are some subjects that should be focused on more than the
arts
such
as mathematics.
In other words
, mathematics would be developed in most of the sciences.
In addition
, the
arts
are fun more than helpful,
however
, the
arts
would help people to have more skills and talents. To illustrate, the films, painting, and music are hobbies.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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