The maps below show the center of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its develpment. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given Maps illustrate a specific
area
of Islip which is a small town at present, and how it is going to be with its development plans.
As can be seen, the countryside of Islip in the town centre is going to have a massive change. The shops
in front of the countryside will be removed and the shopping centre and other facilities will be applied as a given plan. On the other hand
, shops
that are in front of the main road
will remain as it is.
To be more precise, the development plan shows a remarkable improvement in the countryside by applying a bus station, car park and New housing and as mentioned it uses shopping centres instead
of some shops
near the main road
. There will be also
a pedestrians-only road
instead
of the main road
near these facilities. Another significant feature that can be observed is the improvement of roads in the planning which is extra high. These new roads will be dual carriageways.
Furthermore
, there will be a new housing area
instead
of just a housing area
in front of the shops
. Also
, the park area
will have less area
than it has next to the roads.Submitted by hedoyeraisy on
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