The diagram illustrates the process of production sugar in a specific plant (sugar cane). Overall, sugar cane can be used to produce sugar in seven different process, starts from growing and ends by drying and cooling process which becomes sugar.
The diagram illustrates the
process
of production sugar
in a specific plant (Change preposition
of sugar
sugar
cane).
Overall
, sugar
cane can be used to produce sugar
in seven different process
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processes
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starting
from
growing and Change preposition
with
ends
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ending
by
drying and cooling Change preposition
with
process
which becomes sugar
.
At
the first step, the plant should grow Change preposition
In
12
to 18 months, Change preposition
for 12
then
it will be harvested. Harvesting
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The harvesting
process
can be done either manually or by using specific
machine. Add an article
the specific
a specific
Next
step, will be cutting down and crashing to make juice. Correct article usage
The next
Additionally
, the juice should be purified by applying particular
filter which is called Correct article usage
a particular
Limestone
filter.
The purified juice needs to enter a new Correct article usage
a Limestone
process
which is known as evaporation. In the evaporation process
, it heats until becomes a syrup. Further
, it should be centrifuged in order to separate sugar
crystals from the liquid through a process
called centrifugation process
. Finally
, it sugar
cristals
should dry and cool to become Correct your spelling
crystals
a
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sugar
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