The map below shows 2 possible sites (S1 and S2) of a new supermarket planned for the town of GARLSDON.
The map below illustrates two different places in order to construct a new supermarket in Garlsdon city.
It is clear that
both sites are located in an industrial area and close to the railway and main roads with a 65000 population but, S1 is in the countryside and S2 is in the middle of the city.
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First,
S1 is located in the northwest of Garlsdon which is close to Hindon with 12 km and situated in the countryside. Linking Words
Also
, there are railways and main roads in order to transport which makes convenient conditions for residents. Linking Words
In addition
, it is a good situation for people that live in Hindon and Brandson in order to use Linking Words
this
supermarket.
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Second,
S2 which is located in the centre of the town and close to Crandson with 25 km. Linking Words
Therefore
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this
place is an industrial and residential area which makes comfortable place for people who are living there. Linking Words
Also
, there is a big railway to communicate with other places Linking Words
such
as S1, Hndon and Brandson.Linking Words
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