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The map below shows 2 possible sites (S1 and S2) of a new supermarket planned for the town of GARLSDON.

The map below shows 2 possible sites (S1 and S2) of a new supermarket planned for the town of GARLSDON.
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The given diagram presents the development of two
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site
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sites
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 named S1 and S2 of
new
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the new
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supermarket
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 for GARLSDON
town
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. It can be seen that
,
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site
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 S1 of
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supermarket
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the supermarket
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 is estimated to build
in
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on
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the north
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north east
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northeast
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side
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 of
town
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 which is
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the countrside
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countrside
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countryside
.The north and south
sidee
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sides
side
 are reserved for housing. We can see that
,
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indusrties
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industries
 will be
buit
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built
 in
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the center
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center
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 of the
town
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 of GARLSDON which almost cover half of the
town
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 area. From
the
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apply
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site
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 S1 there will be railways and main roads
side
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 by
side
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 .
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supermarket
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Supermarket
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site
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 S1 will built in between railways and main roads.
Main
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 road is 12 km to Hindon
town
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 from
S1
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the S1
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supermarket
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.
On the contrary
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,
site
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 S2 supermall will be built in the middle of
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town
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the town
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center
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centre
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 as there is no traffic zone .supermall
site
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 S2 will
16
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be 16
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 km from
bransdon
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Bransdon
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town
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 which has 15,000
of
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people and 25
kilometers
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 from
cransdon
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Cransdon
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town
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in
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which 29000
populatin
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population
 lives.S2
site
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 of
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supermarket
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the supermarket
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 will be covered by industrial areas around. The main railway crossing passes by
site
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numer
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number
 two.
This
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 is the exact same railway from
site
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 S1 .
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Overall
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Over all
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Overall
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, One
site
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 S1 will be built
in
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on
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the country
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country
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countryside
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side
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 of
town
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whereas
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site
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 S2 will be built in
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the center
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center
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centre
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 of
town
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words site, supermarket, town, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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