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In some countries, using internet in schools is getting more popular. Is this a positive or a negative development?

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Lately, there has been a soaring trend in equipping schools with computer devices. I believe that
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 is a highly beneficial development, but
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 exhibits several signs of imperfection. In
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 essay, I will discuss both aspects of
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 development.
To begin
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, the primary benefit of
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 implementation is giving students the ability to freely access computers for educational purposes. By allowing
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 access, they are given an endless supply of content and information that can be applied to their studies; they are free to
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 the computers in whatever way they desire.
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, they could utilize it to upgrade their schoolwork earlier or to finalize their presentation.
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,
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, students are
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 prone to abuse
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 position of freedom, opting to
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 it for more recreational purposes than educational ones.
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,
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 would be a problem in maintaining the balance between those who want to
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 the devices for studying and those who
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 them to play games,
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. In conclusion, personally, I strongly recommend
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 sort of implementation. Something like
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 could greatly enhance the students' learning capability,
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, there needs to be proper restrictions and balances when importing
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 new system; disciplinary measures should be accounted for.
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