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Many people have a close relationship with their pets. These people treat their birds, cats, or other animals as members of their family. In your opinion, are such relationships good? Why or why not?

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It has long been a common belief that clogs have a better companionship than
cats
while
 others disagree and think that
cats
 can do a better
jobs
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job
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.
In
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From
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 the writer's
prespective
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perspective
,
cats
 are quiet so it is suitable for
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a worker
the worker
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worker
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workers
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 who
need
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needs
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 a
soff
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soft
 friend
at the end
 of the
day
. One of the core reasons why
cats
 should be
people
's
friend
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friends
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 has been the way in which it is easy
care
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to care
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alloras
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for alloras
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as well as
 not depend on their
owner
. To put it simply,
people
 who usually travel or go to
work
 for
long
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a long
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day
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days
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,
they
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apply
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can
lel
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all
 cals in their
house
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houses
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 with some
foods
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food
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 and water,
cats
 will be always there, waiting for
its
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their
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owner
,
do
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and do
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 not run around or scratch clothes.
In other words
,
cats
 are independent,
it
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they
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 can do everything
such
 as go to the toilet or take a
balk
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baulk
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by
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apply
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.
itselves
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itself
 without
helpiny
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helping
, so
people
 would feel relieved if they do not have much time to take care of them.
As a result
,
alsolutely
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absolutely
people
 who
really
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are really
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 busy with their
work
, they will choose cals for those reasons.
By contrast
,
dogs
 are the most loyal animal ever so
it
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they
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also
 play a key role in some
family
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families
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 to explain
further
,
dogs
 are almost very angry. and uncomfortable when
stranger
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strangers
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touched
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touch
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it
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its
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 fur, so
people
 usually choose
dogs
. Lm*a_{j} feel as a security for their house.
Furthermore
,
dogs
 will
alway proted
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always protect
 their.
owner
 when they
met
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meet
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 any danger by
its
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their
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 loyalty and duty,
also
this
 is the way
dogs
 do to show
its
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their
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grateful
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gratitude
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 to the
owner
 who
feed
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feeds
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it
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them
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day
 by
day
.
Therefore
, choosing
dogs
 to
became
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become
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 a pet
as well as
 guarding houses make it became important in some houses.
In
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From
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 the writer's perspective,
cats
 are the best choice for
people
need
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who need
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 to
work
 the whole
day
. To put it plainly, unlike energetic
dogs
, alleats keep their mood by themselves,
it
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they
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 usually play on
its
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their
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 own and
just
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are just
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 happy.
when
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 it
saw
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sees
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 the
owner
turn
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comes
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 back home
so
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apply
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cats
 are suitable for workers
work
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who work
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 full
day
 and
at the end
 of the
day
, they want to take a rest and relax, absolutely
cats
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Cats
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 will be their friend, it will
curled
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curl
be curled
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 up in their hands, both of them will feel comfortable and satisfied. As a
consequency
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consequence
,
cats
 will always have a good
relationstup
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relationship
 with
people
 because of its
feature
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features
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. In conclusion, absolutely
dogs
 will protect
the
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their
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owner
 when they
mel
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feel
 danger,
however
,
cals
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cats
 can do a better job
by
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with
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its
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their
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 easy care
as well as
special
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their special
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 personalities,
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and it
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it
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they
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 will always remain a good
companion
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companions
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with
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to
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people
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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