The map below is of the town of kawton.a new mall is planned for the town.The map shows the two possible sites , A and B . Summarise the information by selectiand reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevnt.

The map below is of the town of kawton.a new mall is planned for the town.The map shows the two possible sites , A and B . 

Summarise the information by selectiand reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevnt.
The provided map illustrates the proposed
of
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two sites A and
B
for
new
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the new
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Bazar in
kawton
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Kawton
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.The population of
this
town
about
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is about
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200.000.
Overall
,it can be clearly
notest
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noted
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that
site
B
is surrounded by
many
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housing
while
site
A located between
railway
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the railway
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and
roadway
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the roadway
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. Looking at
map
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the map
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in more
details
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detail
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,
site
A
which
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is
locates
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located
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near
to
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Batad airport and
it
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has
population
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a population
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about
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of about
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4 million.The
site
located
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is located
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in the eastern north of the
town
between
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the rail
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rail way
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railway
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and
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the motor
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motor way
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motorway
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.
In addition
, it is located
neaxt
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near
to
country side
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countryside
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.
On the other hand
,
the
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site
B
located
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is located
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near to
sea
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the sea
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,
however
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the mall view will be
attracted
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attractive
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.What is more, it
surrounded
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is surrounded
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by housing,
town
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the town
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center
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centre
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and
countryside
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the countryside
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which
located
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is located
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in the west of the
town
.
However
, the
site
accessible
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is accessible
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by
long
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a long
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railway.It is close to the port
however
the population in
this
town
about
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is about
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9.000 which conder lower than
site
A , It is
a
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quite far from Dumalag
abot
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about
15 min.
As well
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Also
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the
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site
B
is more appropriate
of constructed
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for constructing
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a new mall because it is surrounded by residential
area
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areas
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and
countryside
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the countryside
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which enable people to easy making shopping from the market .
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words b, town, site with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban planning
  • residential area
  • commercial development
  • traffic congestion
  • local economy
  • sustainable development
  • public transportation
  • environmental impact
  • community engagement
  • economic revitalization
  • foot traffic
  • retailers
  • chain stores
  • landmarks
  • accessibility
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