The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided diagram illustrates information about
change
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the change
a change
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in public library floor plan from 20 years to
present
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the present
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.
Overall
, the library
have
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has
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many
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more
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technical machines
such
as kiosks and computers
more
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apply
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than past.
As a result
, employee's
room
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rooms
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was decreasing and
vistors
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visitors
rest place was increasing. In detail,
information
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the information
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desk (past : enquiry desk )
room
was smaller than 20 years ago.
However
, the
room
changed the cafe.
Also
,
children's
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the children's
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book part was smaller too. The
room
replaced
lecture
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the lecture
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room
. And,
cds
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CDs
,videos,computer games
room
changed events
room
. The
room
had storytelling events place and
tow
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two
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sofas.
Forthemore
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Furthermore
, it located
chidren's
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children's
fiction books part on
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the other
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other
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another
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side. In
additon
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addition
, the
library
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library's
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middle hall had
table
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tables
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and chairs
in
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apply
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20 years ago. But, they
was
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were
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cleaning.
And
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apply
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,
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The adults
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adults
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adult
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fiction books part moved right side behind
information
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the information
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desk. And
then
, the place
becomed
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become
becomes
became
smaller.
Then
, it has all
referance
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reference
books.
Also
,
reading
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the reading
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room
changed
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the compter
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compter
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computer
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room
.
the
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The
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room
size
do
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does
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not
changing
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change
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words room with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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