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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (Co2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (Co2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
The line graph shows the
emission
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 of carbon dioxide in 4 European countries in the
year
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 from 1967 to 2007. The mission of Co2 is recorded per individual. From the available details in the graph, it shows that during these 50 years
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emission
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the emission
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 of Co2 in
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UK
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the UK
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 and
Sweden
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 has reduced,
while
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 in Italy and
Portugal
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,Portugal
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 it has increased. Actually, the secretion of carbon dioxide in Italy was only
fraction
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a fraction
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 above 4 metric
tonnes
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 in
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year
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the year
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 1967,but within
decade
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a decade
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 it
raised
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rose
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 above 6 metric
tonnes
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 and gained
value
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a value
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 of 2 metric
tonnes
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 per 10 years. After that production of Co2 continued at
constant
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a constant
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 rate and by the
year
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 2007
this
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 value was
closed
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close
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 to 8 metric
tonnes
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. Almost similar behaviour was
showed
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shown
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 by the
emission
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 of Co2 in Portugal, where CO2 secretion was below 2 metric tons in the
year
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 1967 and with continuous increase it reached
to
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apply
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above 5 metric
tonnes
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 in 2007.
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,
emission
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 of
this
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 particular gas showed
opposite
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the opposite
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 behaviour in
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UK
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the UK
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 and
Sweden
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 compared to Italy and Portugal. In
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UK
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the UK
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 and
Sweden
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,
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emission
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the emission
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 of Co2 was at
peak
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a peak
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by
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of
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 11 and 9 metric
tonnes
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 respectively in 1967. But after
that
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 it started declining in
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UK
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the UK
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 and in
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Sweden
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,Sweden
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 it jumped to about 10 metric
ton
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tons
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 by 1977. After 1977 the
emission
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 of Co2 in both
UK
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 and
Sweden
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 decreased tremendously and in
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year
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the year
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 2007
this
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emission
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 was 9 and 5 metric
tonnes
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 in
UK
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 and
Sweden
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.
Overall
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, it displays that
due to
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 certain safety
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actions
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action
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,action
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 the
emission
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 of
Co2
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CO2
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 is reduced in two countries and it has increased in
other
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the other
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 two nations.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words emission, year, co, uk, sweden, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • per person
  • United Kingdom
  • Sweden
  • Italy
  • Portugal
  • graph
  • compare
  • average
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • years
  • period
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