some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things.other poeple think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is true that there are two groups of people with opposite attitudes about how effective are advertisements. Some

persons

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believe that advertising is significantly influential and can persuade customers to buy.

However

, the other ones argue that advertisement is common and old-fashioned and nobody pays enough attention to them. So it’s not an appropriate way to convince

persons

to purchase. In my perspective, individual experiences in marketing clarify

this

fact that,

although

advertisement is a common way,

but

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it has got enough effect on humans’ decisions. In the following paragraphs, I will shed light on

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contradiction between these two groups’ beliefs. On the one hand,

due to

numerous products and services, every

day

we face

with

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an ocean of choices to choose

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from.

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So producers should have a method to introduce their commodity and the most conventional method is advertising.

Consequently

, for the sake of a wide variety of goods and manufacturers, the number of advertisements is incredibly high and is increasing

day

Hence

we encounter a huge amount of them every

day

and

consequently

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it is expected that they may lose their efficiency.

Actually

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people don’t care about them since they are too much.

Furthermore

, it is crystal clear to

persons

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that producers exaggerate when they want to introduce their product.

Thus

, they are aware of their tricks and can’t be tempted to buy.

On the other hand

, most of the advertisements utilize colourful,

eye-catchy

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, and attractive landscapes and scenes. so they can affect

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individuals’ minds and

finally

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customers are tempted. Indeed, some

persons

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people

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can’t control their temptations and buy the advertised product.

Moreover

, in some cases

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we are confused in making the decision to buy our requirements because of a wide range of various products, it is undeniable that we choose the brand that we have heard its name before, unconsciously.

To sum up

, in spite of being common, the advertisement can be extremely effective and influential on

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minds which can lead to a high amount of sales for producers and staff.

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some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things.other poeple think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

In many countries, the number of animals and plants is declining. Why do you think this is happening? How can this issue be solved?

Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.

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It is too expensive to look after and repair old building .Tho money should spend on building new modern buildings instead .To what extent do you agree or disagree.