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some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things.other poeple think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is true that there are two groups of people with opposite attitudes about how effective are advertisements. Some
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 believe that advertising is significantly influential and can persuade customers to buy.
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, the other ones argue that advertisement is common and old-fashioned and nobody pays enough attention to them. So it’s not an appropriate way to convince
persons
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 to purchase. In my perspective, individual experiences in marketing clarify
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 advertisement is a common way,
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it has got enough effect on humans’ decisions. In the following paragraphs, I will shed light on
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 contradiction between these two groups’ beliefs. On the one hand,
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 numerous products and services, every
day
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 we face
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an ocean of choices to choose
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 So producers should have a method to introduce their commodity and the most conventional method is advertising.
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, for the sake of a wide variety of goods and manufacturers, the number of advertisements is incredibly high and is increasing
day
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 we encounter a huge amount of them every
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consequently
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 it is expected that they may lose their efficiency.
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 people don’t care about them since they are too much.
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, it is crystal clear to
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 that producers exaggerate when they want to introduce their product.
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, they are aware of their tricks and can’t be tempted to buy.
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, most of the advertisements utilize colourful,
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, and attractive landscapes and scenes. so they can affect
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individuals’ minds and
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 customers are tempted. Indeed, some
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 can’t control their temptations and buy the advertised product.
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, in some cases
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 we are confused in making the decision to buy our requirements because of a wide range of various products, it is undeniable that we choose the brand that we have heard its name before, unconsciously.
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, in spite of being common, the advertisement can be extremely effective and influential on
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persons’
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 minds which can lead to a high amount of sales for producers and staff.
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