Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is true that in some human's
opinions
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employers
such
as doctors and engineers should
work
in a country, where they
studied
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and practice. Other
people
think that workers should be free, and
work
where they wish. In my ,opinion it will be good only in some aspects, but
overall
I will support the second view. One strong argument in favour of advantages is a comfortable place for the worker.
This
means that employers will do
work
that they did in the past, in training, and it is comfortable for them. American research showed that 40
percent
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of workers in the world
work
in places where they have studied. They do not
towant
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want
change their locations because of afraid that they can not settle in a new place. ,
Consequently
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if employees want to
work
in peace of mind, the location will not be changed by them. There are several arguments why
work
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working
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in another country is good.
Firstly
this
is of course
salary
. In other ,words if humans want to get a good
salary
they should change
workplace
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.
According to
the statistics of 2022 year 45 percent of employees changed their location because of
salary
. The second argument is learning a new language and expanding one's worldview.
This
means that
people
who will go to another country will learn new languages and travel. Statistics showed that the other 15 per cent of
people
want to travel by working. For ,that there are companies “
work
and travel”. ,
Consequently
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if someone wants to be free, learn a new language, or travel, these humans can do it by “
work
and travel”.
Therefore
if
people
do not
towant
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want to
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take a low
salary
, they should go by second way. ,
Furthermore
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I recommend the American company “us.
work
&travel” for improving employee’s worldview and
salary
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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