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It is better for student to study from home rather than go to school. Do you agree or disagree with this statement

#student #study #home #school
While
 many people believe that learning at
home
 is more
effectively
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 than learning at school, in my opinion, I believe that studying at school is more better than at
home
.
To begin
, the main reason for my disagreement is
students
 who study at
home
 can not have
a
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good social skills.
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 do not have a chance to communicate with each other which
lead
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 to they can not
make
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 any friends. It will cause a big problem for
students
especially
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 for teenagers who
is
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 in
sensitive
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 period. They can easily get psychological health problems
such
 as
:
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 depressed,
anti- social
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 or autism.
Moreover
,
students
 can be immersed
by
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 the internet. Not many parents will take care
their
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students
 learning,
therefore
,
students
 will be distracted by
the
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social media. The result is
students
 ignore
the
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study
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studies
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 and addicted to the internet.
In addition
, houses are not
the
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 suitable place for
students
 to do exercises. The reason that sports equipment and sports which require a large space can not be designed at
home
. So,
students
 who can not do exercises or play sports will have
a
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weak health and easily get illness.
Finally
,
students
 can get more introductions from the teachers. The lessons are taught more carefully and
detailed
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, so
students
 can gain knowledge better.
To
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 conclusion, studying at school has more benefits and
affect
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effects
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 than studying at
home
.
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