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It is better for student to study from home rather than go to school. Do you agree or disagree with this statement

#student #study #home #school
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 many people believe that learning at
home
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 is more
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 than learning at school, in my opinion, I believe that studying at school is more better than at
home
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.
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, the main reason for my disagreement is
students
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 who study at
home
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 can not have
a
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good social skills.
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 do not have a chance to communicate with each other which
lead
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 to they can not
make
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 any friends. It will cause a big problem for
students
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especially
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 for teenagers who
is
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 in
sensitive
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 period. They can easily get psychological health problems
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 as
:
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 depressed,
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 or autism.
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,
students
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 can be immersed
by
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 the internet. Not many parents will take care
their
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students
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 learning,
therefore
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,
students
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 will be distracted by
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social media. The result is
students
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 ignore
the
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study
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studies
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 and addicted to the internet.
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, houses are not
the
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 suitable place for
students
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 to do exercises. The reason that sports equipment and sports which require a large space can not be designed at
home
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. So,
students
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 who can not do exercises or play sports will have
a
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weak health and easily get illness.
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,
students
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 can get more introductions from the teachers. The lessons are taught more carefully and
detailed
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, so
students
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 can gain knowledge better.
To
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 conclusion, studying at school has more benefits and
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effects
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 than studying at
home
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