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Is it better for student to study from rather than go to school. Do you agree or disagree with this statement

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There can be little doubt that in recent eras pupils are encouraged to learn online at home
instead
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 of attending school to learn. I completely
agreed
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 with
this
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new
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news
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of
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for
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 several reasons. Studying at school does not require only an amount of money on knowledge and even the money on the facilities of it. Parents need to pay
million
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dollars
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of dollars
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 every month for the kids to have a lesson in a class
which
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 has air conditioners or fans in the classrooms. In condition, some of the schools do not have good quality
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facilities, the amount of money they have to pay for them every single month
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 not make sense.
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 that, parents have to spend time
to bring
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 their kids to school and
take
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taking
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 them back home leads to a waste of time
of
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doing their jobs. Even though the kids
using
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use
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 the public
transports
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transport
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instead
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, they still need to pay for them every single
days
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.
On the other hand
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, studying online is an alternative choice to gain
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the opportunity
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opportunity
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opportunities
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 for path careers
boarden
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broaden
board
 their horizon degree to support students.
Firstly
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, studying online
course
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courses
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 you can learn whatever you want
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to
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apply
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search on the Internet about the field and start learning
by
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with
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 a click
such
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 as on
the
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apply
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google
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Google
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 find the online lectures offered by some of the most prestigious choices from all over the world. It is so
easier
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easy
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 to find a suitable course or even a degree program that you can follow from home. In conclusion, not only academic achievement is the key
leads
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to a successful career but
also
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 to be well-rounded as same as
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the aim of education and studying online can support
in
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a chieving their
aspriration
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happiness
.

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