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In this era, having a house to live in is better than renting a flat and paying for it every month and it is very important for everyone. This essay explores the primary reasons as well as drawbacks and benefits of this notion. However, in my veiw, benefits of having a flat outweigh negative points.

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In
this
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 era, having a
house
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 to live in is better than renting a flat and paying for it every month and it is very important for everyone.
This
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 essay explores the primary reasons
as well as
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drawbacks
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the drawbacks
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 and
benefits
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 of
this
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 notion.
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, in my
veiw
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view
,
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benefits
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the benefits
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 of having a flat outweigh
negative
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the negative
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 points. First of all, there are several reasons behind having
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your own
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 home,
such
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 as you do not need to pay for it and
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 you can spend
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 capital for other life's
need
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.
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, if you want to repair a small part or rebuild it, you can easily do it.
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, if your family members increase in number, you can add a new room or you can change something in order to be more comfortable to live. These are some of the primary causes behind having own
house
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 which has lots of
benefits
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.
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, if someone lives in a
renting
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 home, he should pay monthly for
owner
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the owner
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 of the
house
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 and he can not
rebulid
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rebuild
 or change any old rooms that he prefers.
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, living in
renting
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a rented
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house
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 brings some
dificulties
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difficulties
such
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 as, it is necessary to pay every month for
owner
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the owner
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 and unfortunately, you have to increase your working days or working hours in order to cover money for all
the
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 life's
cost
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costs
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.
Therefore
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, I think that living in a
renting
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rented
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house
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 has many negative aspects
instead
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 of
benefits
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. To
summerize
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summarise
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,
for having
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to have
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 a good life, everyone needs to work
for purchasing
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to purchase
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 his or her own
house
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.
However
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, it has some drawbacks, but
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benefits
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the benefits
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 of having flats
better
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are better
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 than
negatives
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the negatives
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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