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In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified. Do you agree or disagree?

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In a large number of nations, smoking in public has been considered an illegal activity.
Also
, most of the
people
 consider
this
 action as justifiable. In my opinion, a ban on smoking in public
places
 can bring astounding benefits for the
overall
 welfare of society.
To begin
 with,
people
 who are passive
smokers
, which means they breathe in the
smoke
 released from other
people
's cigarettes and suffer from life-threatening diseases
such
 as asthma, lung diseases and other issues in breathing.
Therefore
, non-
smokers
 suffer physically, emotionally and cognitively
due to
 the act of smoking in public
places
. To elaborate, passive
smokers
also
 face stress and anxiety because they are unable to accept the notion that their physical pain is directly or indirectly linked to a drug, which they have never adopted in their life.
Additionally
, inhaling the
smoke
 released by cigarettes is harmful for both active and passive
smokers
;
thus
, when
smokers
 use cigarettes in public
places
 it
also
 affects the mental abilities of
people
 who do not
smoke
.
Furthermore
, smoking in public
places
also
 leads to detrimental effects on the lifestyle of teenagers. During the age of adolescence, youngsters are unable to develop their understanding of vices and virtues, so they simply imitate actions that take place around them.
As a result
, many adolescents throughout the world begin smoking by observing their elders doing the same.
Secondly
, during the age of adolescence, teenagers face fluctuations in their hormones, so
due to
 hormonal changes, they are always enthusiastic to try and explore new products adopted by
people
 in their community. Ultimately, adolescents face drug abuse during their adulthood because after one use they get addicted to use the drugs on a daily basis.
To conclude
, I fervently believe that a ban on public smoking can bring fruitful results, for
people
 of all age groups. As
people
 can maintain their physical and mental well-being, by staying away from active
smokers
, who
smoke
 publically.
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