the bar chart below shows the percentage of australian men and m=women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010 summarise the information

the bar chart below shows the percentage of australian men and m=women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010 

summarise the information
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The given bar chart provides information regarding the percentage of both Australian male and female individuals having physical activity in various
age
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groups in 2010. It is noticeable to see that more women between the ages of 25 to 64 had physical activities than men their
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these figures roughly crossed in their older ages (65 and over). 52.8% of young males from 15 to 24 worked out frequently, and as they grew older
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figure decreased, reaching 39.5% at the
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of 35 to 44.
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, after the
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of 45, their physical activities rose, and by the
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of 45 to 54, 43.1% of them had regular physical activities.
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, only 47.7% of females aged 15 to 24 had constant physical activity, which was less than males, but
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figure leveled up as they aged, and reached its highest point of 53.3% at the
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of 45 to 54.
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,
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figure fell from 55 and over.
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