The graph below shows the types of transport used by tourists who visited New Zealand from five countries in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph illustrates the mediums of transportation (

Air

Coach

,Car and Ferry) used by foreigners from five different countries (

British

German

Japanese

Korean

and

Australian

) for visiting New Zealand in the year 2004 percentage-wise.

Overall

, the majority of countries (

British

German

Korean

and

Australian

) loved to

travel

by car

instead

of other mediums of

transport

While

Japanese

people

enjoyed travelling via

air

However

, the least number of guests had their own choice of mode of

transport

according, to their comfort.

Likewise

, foreigners of

British

are not familiar with the

transport

medium of

coach

whereas

Japanese

people

are not familiar with

Coach

Firstly

, the

British

German

Korean

and

Australian

people

loved to

travel

by car in Newzeland which is 60%,52%,50% and 48% respectively.

In addition

air

medium of

transport

also

plays an important role in Britain,Germany, Japan and Korea which is 46%,35%,55% and 30% respectively.Where lowest percentage of

Australian

people

travel

air

is about 10%.

Finally

, there is an average number of tourists who

travel

coach

and ferry to New Zealand.It is one of the least used modes of

transport

by visitors.In almost all five countries (

British

German

Japanese

Korean

and

Australian

) percentage rate for coaches is 19%,20%,51%40% and 8% respectively.

While

percentage of ferry users visitors is slightly high in comparison to

coach

users which is about 35%,58%,10%,10% and 15% respectively.

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