The graph below shows the types of transport used by tourists who visited New Zealand from five countries in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the types of transport used by tourists who visited New Zealand from five countries in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the mediums of transportation (
Air
,
Coach
,Car and Ferry) used by foreigners from five different countries (
British
,
German
,
Japanese
,
Korean
and
Australian
) for visiting New Zealand in the year 2004 percentage-wise.
Overall
, the majority of countries (
British
,
German
,
Korean
and
Australian
) loved to
travel
by car
instead
of other mediums of
transport
.
While
Japanese
people
enjoyed travelling via
air
.
However
, the least number of guests had their own choice of mode of
transport
according, to their comfort.
Likewise
, foreigners of
British
are not familiar with the
transport
medium of
coach
whereas
Japanese
people
are not familiar with
Coach
.
Firstly
, the
British
,
German
,
Korean
and
Australian
people
loved to
travel
by car in Newzeland which is 60%,52%,50% and 48% respectively.
In addition
,
air
medium of
transport
also
plays an important role in Britain,Germany, Japan and Korea which is 46%,35%,55% and 30% respectively.Where lowest percentage of
Australian
people
travel
by
air
is about 10%.
Finally
, there is an average number of tourists who
travel
by
coach
and ferry to New Zealand.It is one of the least used modes of
transport
by visitors.In almost all five countries (
British
,
German
,
Japanese
,
Korean
and
Australian
) percentage rate for coaches is 19%,20%,51%40% and 8% respectively.
While
percentage of ferry users visitors is slightly high in comparison to
coach
users which is about 35%,58%,10%,10% and 15% respectively.
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