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Many products that we buy are made in other countries. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion.

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Every
country
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import
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 and exports
goods
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 from other countries. Most Countries are required to
import
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products
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 from others because of the unavailability of raw materials or the high cost of the same.
Import
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 of things offers advantages
along with
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 some disadvantages which we shall discuss
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 in
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Firstly
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, Buying
goods
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 from other
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country
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 has some advantages for the
country
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 and the buyer. Buyer purchases
goods
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 for numerous factors like good
quality
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, cheaper cost and regular production. Better
quality
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products
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 at lower prices result in an increase in sales and avoid competition.
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, In India, we
import
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toys
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, fabric etc from China and
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 helps business owners to sell their
products
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 at higher profits and earn huge margins.
Whereas
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, Indian
toys
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 are not that good in
quality
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 resulting in low sales.
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, Machines that create those
toys
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 are not available in India, The technology is not up to the mark to create
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toys
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.
On the other hand
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,
Import
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 of
goods
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 has some disadvantages as well.
Import
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 doesn't help your
country
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's economy to grow and decreases the job opportunities in your own
country
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. It demotivates the industry in your own
country
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 as the business goes outside. A decrease in business results in low tax calculation.
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, In India, people use fabric
that is
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 imported from China and a recent trend shows people avoiding their own cotton clothing
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 many fabric mills are shut down for the same reason. In conclusion, I believe that
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import
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 of
goods
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 is not bad as it provides many opportunities to earn well for Indian traders. To avoid other factors government should incorporate schemes where they can motivate and provide help to
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 businesses to grow and create better
quality
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products
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 in their own
country
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.
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