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Many products that we buy are made in other countries. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion.

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Every
country
import
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 and exports
goods
 from other countries. Most Countries are required to
import
products
 from others because of the unavailability of raw materials or the high cost of the same.
Import
 of things offers advantages
along with
 some disadvantages which we shall discuss
further
 in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, Buying
goods
 from other
country
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 has some advantages for the
country
 and the buyer. Buyer purchases
goods
 for numerous factors like good
quality
, cheaper cost and regular production. Better
quality
products
 at lower prices result in an increase in sales and avoid competition.
For instance
, In India, we
import
toys
, fabric etc from China and
this
 helps business owners to sell their
products
 at higher profits and earn huge margins.
Whereas
, Indian
toys
 are not that good in
quality
 resulting in low sales.
Moreover
, Machines that create those
toys
 are not available in India, The technology is not up to the mark to create
such
toys
.
On the other hand
,
Import
 of
goods
 has some disadvantages as well.
Import
 doesn't help your
country
's economy to grow and decreases the job opportunities in your own
country
. It demotivates the industry in your own
country
 as the business goes outside. A decrease in business results in low tax calculation.
For example
, In India, people use fabric
that is
 imported from China and a recent trend shows people avoiding their own cotton clothing
consequently
 many fabric mills are shut down for the same reason. In conclusion, I believe that
import
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 of
goods
 is not bad as it provides many opportunities to earn well for Indian traders. To avoid other factors government should incorporate schemes where they can motivate and provide help to
such
 businesses to grow and create better
quality
products
 in their own
country
.
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