More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicine. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people, rich countries are stealing from poor countries. Others feel that this is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world. Do you agree or disagree?

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is that many intelligent individuals are changing their
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from poor to rich states to become
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in master areas like engineering, information technology and treatment. Some
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deem that by motivating
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such
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, well-developed
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are getting illegal from underdeveloped nations. Others
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just one side of the Personally, I tend to think that by encouraging rich
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are gaining more well-educated
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from poor
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and they have a chance to pick a residence
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they can choose the convenient conditions for their sake and in most situations wealthy
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can give appropriate possibilities. A good case in point is many African
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earning money in the United States of America and in Europe
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be argued that the brain drain and migration are the result of caring the children.
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the children of more qualified
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can attend many courses, ameliorate their knowledge and broaden
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about the world. Take
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example, the kids of
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in Canada
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approximately two or three languages and demonstrate high literacy. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account in our final analyses we can say that
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stealing, moving from poor to rich
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is the key of the full of success and freedom of finance.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Brain drain
  • Globalization
  • Skilled workforce
  • Socioeconomic growth
  • Economic disparity
  • Specialist areas
  • Free market of skills
  • Immigration policies
  • Labor market
  • Talent attraction
  • Professional development
  • Remittances
  • Economic incentives
  • Knowledge transfer
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