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People today often use the internet to learn about the culture of other countries. This means that it is not that important to travel to those countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Human beings have the thirst to gather new knowledge by grasping the cultures, traditions, and heritage of other
nations
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 in modern civilization, administrative boundaries have created an invisible interruption to enter counties without proper documentation. That’s why people have to rely
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 the internet mostly to gather new experiences rather than
visiting
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 countries.
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 essay will illustrate the importance of
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the world
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world wide web
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World Wide Web
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 to explore the traditional
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 of other
nations
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 despite having
the
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 interest
to experience
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in experiencing
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 the tradition
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in person
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. Lots of resources are stored on the web. Anyone can search for a particular topic in the search engine and can find
out
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the
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relevant articles,
audio
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 visuals from there. Sometimes people have some limitations to
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 a live cultural event because of not only the tight schedule,
absence
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and absence
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 of proper documentation but
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 the monetary consequences. So, in those circumstances, people must depend on the live telecast of the video streaming platform of that cultural event which can be observed from any corner of the world.
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, by viewing cultural events or traditions of other
nations
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 via the lens of the web, individuals end up with the impression that they should visit the countries to have a greater understanding of the cultures.
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, despite having easy access to the online world, individuals continue to go to other countries to participate in cultural events.
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, the internet is an innovation that allows individuals to witness the cultural activities and history of other
nations
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 who are unable to present physically because of too many types of limitations in their hectic lives.
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