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Some people think that people moving to a new country should accept the new culture of the foreign country. Others think that they should live as a separate minority group with a different lifestyle. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #country #culture #minority #group #lifestyle
Many individuals believe that
emigrate
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 to
other
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another country
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country
 should interact with them
while
 some
people
 should
may
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stay within their own groups. I agree with living
by
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 the new culture,
this
 essay will discuss both aspects and give my own view. On the one hand, when we move to a new
country
 everything with you will be very strange and difficult.
Therefore
,
the
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communication is going to be a strength
of
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apply
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yourself
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apply
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. If we interact, we can gain more knowledge about that
country
 and
people
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the people
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 there.
Moreover
, we can have
chance
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a chance
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 to study
new
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 language and make more
relationship
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relationships
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 to get on with
people
in
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there.
On the other hand
, living
separated
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separately
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 you may feel comfortable among your own
people
. Do not have to take time to spend on
new
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a new
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 language.
Furthermore
, the discrimination will be less to avoid.
For example
,
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 is still a problem when other
people
 move to a
country
. Because of
that
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 we can prevent
the
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apply
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discrimination if we live
in
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on
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own
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our own
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.
However
, in my
opinion
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go
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going
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 to
other
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another
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country
 and
keep
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keeping
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 your own group can make
you
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it
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 hard to live in their
country
. If we communicate and accept
the
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their
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 culture of them, we can learn more
then
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and then
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 get more job
opporturnities
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opportunities
. The emigrant to
other
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another
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country
is make
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makes
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 you develop and gain
the
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success in life. Do not keep your own and
lost
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 the chance
changing
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to change
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 yourself. In conclusion,
integrate
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integrating
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to
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into
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 the culture is the better way to live in
new
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a new
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country
. Get more chances to improve yourself, do not keep your own group.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • assimilate
  • social cohesion
  • integration
  • navigating the job market
  • cultural preservation
  • sense of belonging
  • heritage
  • multiculturalism
  • cultural landscape
  • support network
  • transition
  • multicultural society
  • mutual respect
  • cultural identity
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