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Do we spend too much time on our mobile phones? write an essay about this topic

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It is now more popular than ever to own a mobile phone and to spend
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 using it to do all sorts of things. Perhaps the
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 has come to ask ourselves an important question. Do we spend too much
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 on our mobile
phones
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? Some people think that nowadays, it is only natural to be dependent on mobile
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. With the technological advancements in recent years, people can now do almost everything with their
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,
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 as shopping, making hotel reservations, looking up the weather forecast or even studying an online course.
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, mobile
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 are considered an important tool for socialization. Via social networking apps that are easily accessible on mobile
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, anyone can now share with others whatever he wants at any
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. In short, the mobile phone nowadays is an essential platform for socialization, or even a key element of living a modern life.
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, many would agree that we indeed spend too much
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 on mobile
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, and
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 could be harmful. Studies affirmed that phone radio emissions can affect our brains and might cause some eye problems.
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, our dependence on mobile
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 makes people seldom meet in person as they prefer to talk to each other via text messages which would affect our natural interactions.
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, we rely on our mobile
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 to do almost everything these days, and
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 our lives seem to be much easier, the repercussions of
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 a change need to be taken into consideration, especially at the health and social levels.
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