The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity
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chart below demonstrates the percentage of British
people
donating money to
charity
. The information is grouped
in
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five different age categories for each we witness two columns. The columns depicted in blue color belong to the data from 1990 and the orange columns are for data collected in 2010. In both 1990 and 2010, there
is
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a
raise
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rise
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in donations until
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the middle
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middle ages
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Middle Ages
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and
then
, a small decrease
in
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at
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the end. With that being said, little under a fifth of the population of 18 to
25
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25-year-olds
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year
olds
donated money to
charity
in 1990.
Moreover
, it was raised to close to a third for 26 to 35
year
olds
and to almost a half
in
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for
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36 to 50
year
olds
in 1990.
Finally
, it experienced a small decrease in
people
over 50
years
old.
Similarly
in 2010, the youngest group
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the least to the charities and
then
, the donations
trend
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trended
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upwards
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upward
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until the group of 51 to
65
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65-year-olds
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year
olds
almost half of whom
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to the
charity
.
Furthermore
, a bit over a third of the folk over 65
years
old donate to charities.
To conclude
, the trends in the share of
people
donating to
the
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charities are the same in 1990 and 2010. But,
less
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fewer
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people
under 50
years
old donated money to
charity
in 2010 than they did in 1990 and the opposite is true for
the
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apply
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people
over 50
years
old.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, charity, year, olds, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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