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These days, people work in more than one job, and often change career several times during their life. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this.

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Nowadays, it is becoming more and more common for people to take two jobs. Many have at least one change of career at some point in their lives. But what are the benefits of
this
 situation, and what are the drawbacks? In
this
 essay, I will look at both sides and try to draw some conclusions. Let's begin by looking at the advantages of working in two jobs. One of the main positives of the same is that you will have extra income. The only salary is not enough to all your needs
in addition
 to feeding your family, so your additional income will be very useful in
such
 situations.
Secondly
 working
additionally
 will prevent you from having much leisure
time
. There are many people who spend their
time
 to unnecessary activities like visiting nightclubs or playing computer games. In that case, it is simply impossible as you are a busy person. Turning to the other side of the argument, the shortage of rest is a major problem.
Although
 It is good that you don't have
time
 for unnecessary things, with
this
, you are not able to take a day out to be with your friends or for some kind of entertainment.
This
 often leads you to stress. All things considered, having more than one job is not easy. You will face lots of difficulties and lack of
time
 for rest.
However
, nothing is easy in your life, and to become a successful person, you should be ready to extra effort.
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