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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of diverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages.

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Some
people
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 believe that the advancements in technology will make every vehicle driverless, and
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 will cause damage to our lives because there is a possibility of hacking into
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 machine.
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, I think artificial intelligence (AI) will provide a comfortable area during transportation, and it can enhance reliability with the research recommendations of engineers that can reduce the number of
accidents
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 on the street.
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 with, some groups of
people
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 do not trust AI, which makes them refuse to transport via driverless
vehicles
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 for the reason of cyber security.
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, they are aware of being hacked during each trip, which the cost is live.
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, these
people
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 would
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 use manual cars only since they are afraid of being hacked by criminals.
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, I believe that
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 we have to work until night every day and we have to drive on the way home
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, we deserve to take a break.
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, the survey’s result shows the majority of employers sleep only 4 hours per day, which is not enough; if they can sleep on the way to their office, their brains will be better since they can relax during each journey.
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, AI is more reliable than humans;
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 is because the latest research shows almost 80% of
accidents
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 are caused by human errors. Software engineers carefully develop logical control in modern
vehicles
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such
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 as the Shinkansen in Japan and the Teslar car, which are safer than humans.
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,
people
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 who are drivers have more chance of causing
accidents
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 than driverless
vehicles
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.
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,
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 AI can be hacked and result in
accidents
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, I believe the advantages of modern
vehicles
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 outweigh the drawbacks as the reason
people
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 have more time to sleep and research that talks about human error can be more damaged than hackers.
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