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Band 7.5

Write a letter to the gym manager. In your letter ask what types of membership are available, and what the prices are ask what activities are available ask what the joining procedure is

Dear Manager, I am writing to enquire about the different types of gym memberships available at your establishment,
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 their respective benefits and costs. I have recently moved to
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 city and, as someone who enjoys football, running, and intensive workouts, I would like to continue my fitness routine by joining your gym.
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 I searched online, I could not find clear details. Could you please provide me with a full list of membership options and their monthly fees? I have
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 heard that your gym offers additional activities
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 as swimming, sauna, and steam facilities. I would appreciate it if you could confirm whether these are included in the membership packages.
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, I would be grateful if you could explain the joining procedure, including any documents or requirements needed for enrollment. Thank you for your assistance. I look forward to your response. Yours sincerely, Bunty Batliwala

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task response
All questions in the letter are clear and on topic. You cover membership types, price, activities, and joining steps. If you want, you could also ask for the benefits of each option to be sure.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with small, easy sign words like first, next, also, then, finally to show order. Try to put one idea in each paragraph for a clear flow.
tone
Polite and respectful tone throughout the letter.
content
Clear questions about what you want to know.
format
Good opening and closing lines for a formal letter.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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