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The medical technology is responsible for increasing the average life expectancy. Do you think it is a curse or a blessing?

#technology #life #expectancy #curse
It is true that medicine has become an essential tool for everyone in all areas of our world.
However
,
while
 some people tend to think that
due to
 the medical technology we face with
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 of
humans
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 life, which is
positive
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 trend, I do have an opinion that it may affect
as
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us
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 in
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 way The advantages of medical science on our longevity are obvious.
Firstly
, it affects our planet
as well as
 all of us in general.
Experience
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 could be
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 major benefit
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 because
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the elder
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elder
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older
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 generation always
use
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 to share their knowledge with younger
one
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.
Instead
 of hitting the books, students at universities may ask for elder
surgeons
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opinion
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. Not only that, but
also
 it could be helpful for other spheres
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 chemistry, art, literature,
music
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and music
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.
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, something positive on
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one side can be negative on
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. Nowadays we have a lot of debates
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 lifespan influences the environment. If we had a chance to
life
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 longer,
for instance
, 100
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or
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 more years, we would suffer from overpopulation everywhere.
The
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 great example of
this
 is India, which is burdened with more than 2 billion people. The issue
with
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 overcrowding in
this
 country leads to the scarcity of food, space and water as well. For the reasons I have mentioned above, I believe that the increasing
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lifespan can be really advantageous for
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humanity,
although
 there is the risk of danger to the Earth
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 since it causes environmental problems. If people and
nation
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will
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focus
focuce
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focused
 on the care of their motherland rather than profit, there would not be
such
 arduous difficulties
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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