Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays the great majority of people tend to believe that the creation of
computers
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the most crucial item in our life,
while
others claim that there are a lot of other things that influenced our world as well. 
Although
the
last
opinion can be right in some cases, I support the idea that
computers
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role in educating and working process.     First of all,
this device
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 are superior to everything else as they allow people to access virtually any information posted anywhere in the world at any given time. A few centuries ago humans could not have expected that it would be possible to purchase various goods, read the news and talk with relatives via laptop only in one minute. A network of
computers
has spread its influence on business, communications, economics, entertainment and even politics. 
That is
to say,more than two-thirds of the world's population
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electronic
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machines
every day. Without
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you will feel almost handless.       Not only that
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but
also
 our society depends on the electronic brain, regardless of what it does or where it learns.  If you want to advance in your career, you should know that you cannot achieve it without knowledge in
this
field.
For instance
, 70
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per cent
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jobs in Kazakhstan require Microsoft Word,
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tables spreadsheet skills.
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Furthermore
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Furthermore
, with the help of artificial
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intelligence
intellegentce
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intelligence
, which is
also
gaining popularity, different  tasks can be completed faster Taking everything into consideration, I would say the biggest benefit has been the advent of
computers
, which can be used as incredibly useful devices
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • invention
  • revolutionized
  • industries
  • communication
  • connectivity
  • productivity
  • efficiency
  • advancements
  • scientific research
  • technology
  • access
  • information
  • learn
  • limitations
  • disadvantages
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