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In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this isa positive or a negative development

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Nowadays, it can be seen that there are more
people
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 transferring from the countryside to the urban cities in most locations around the world which shows a declining number of residents in rural areas. In my opinion, I think there is a negative development, and I will discuss my point of view through my essay.
To begin
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 with, one of the basic needs of a person is
food
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 and when there is no supply of
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 it will be difficult for us to function.
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, it will result in lowering the immune system,
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, developing a disease. We acquire
food
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 from the crops that the farmers produce in the countryside. They continuously work to provide rice, fruits, and vegetables that we need to keep us healthy.
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, they are the ones who raise animals that we eat.
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, their population are one of the professions that are exploited and underpaid despite their vast contribution to the
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 supply.
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 is the primary reason why they consider leaving their jobs in provinces to try their luck to find high-paying jobs in cities resulting in declining workers, and
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 an inadequate supply of
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 to sustain a huge number of
people
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 in a country.
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, when fewer
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 work in farm areas our economy is
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 affected because the local crops that are being exported are not sufficient, supplies to other countries will fall and as a ,result the income status of the economy will
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 drop. In conclusion, since there is insufficient supply of the basic goods to produce
food
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 there are more chances that prices will
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 increase and qualities are not met.
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,
people
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 moving from the countryside to cities can lead to more problems aside from being overpopulated, but
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 the status of the country will fall.
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